Agree with funk, the beginning does sound very nice and again i agree whats missing is the bottom end of the bass, its hardly existant which is a shame cos the 1st time the bassline starts (from the silence) would be quite cool if it made things rumble a bit.
The rest of it works quite well, though it seems to be more about whacking as much reverb (though in fairness it isnt annoying, it just seems to be your effect of choice) in there and hoping for the best. This though is a great launching pad for you to work upon. tweak it around mate and give it a good polish over.
maybe change it up in the middle section aswell as it does seem to just repeat itself which some people dont seem to like (but personally speaking and coming from the dance background.. its what im used too hehe), and finally the ending.. abrupt! hehe.
anyway, its a bloody good effort and i hope anything i said there makes some sense hehe, keep it up theres definitely quite the good musician in you
